Thursday, 11 October 2012

Five Sentence Fiction - Detour

Some prompts just grab you from the start and with all this dark fiction that abounds lately I wanted to write a short, snappy, funny story...

So here's my take on Lillie McFerrin's Five Sentence Fiction this week, the picture was just as much of a prompt as the word... Enjoy!

 Detour



Everybody told me not to buy the cheap too-good-to-be-true SatNav from the market.

It looked so pretty with its sparkly cover – I’m a sucker for a bit of bling!

Water gurgled up through the rusty holes of my beat up car.

Squeezing out my sopping wet hair with my left hand I stared at the useless piece of rescued technology in my right.

I wonder if the man at the market will give me a refund?


18 comments:

  1. Great story.
    Fragilewords-Zara.blogspot.com

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  2. Don't you just hate it when that happens? I agree this is a delightfully more upbeat view of the prompt then I went. I always enjoy seeing how a given prompt flows through the creative process of different minds. Nicely done!

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    1. I agree it's always fascinating to see where the prompts lead different people - thanks for dropping by!

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  3. How fun! I can just imagine it! Thanks for putting a smile on my face.

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    1. I do love to make people smile :-)

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  4. Liked this Sarah, how often does that happen? (Not sinking in the car...but the satnav getting it wrong?) You made me giggle!

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    1. youngest son said this story reminded him of the ATMOS system in Dr Who! At least he liked and understood this story - I read one to him this morning and he thought it was rubbish!

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  5. Now this was fun! We've had some interesting results from our GPS from time to time, but this tops them by far... very creative, a nice light read... thanks!

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    1. There's been quite a lot of dark stories just lately and the picture was just screaming out for a funny story - in my opinion! ;-)

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  6. i hope you get a refund! :)this made me chuckle as i can relate to this x

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    1. I love writing this sort of dizzy character I think she is my alter ego - not too hopeful about the refund actually - I suspect the stallholder from the market has scarpered and she's been well and truely done!

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  7. Hey Sarah - many thanks for stopping by the Hearth, it's a pleasure to have your company there :)

    Your FSF put a smile on my face, and thank you for that. If you can put a smile on someone's face each day, no matter who they are, then you have a gift :)

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    1. Thanks Mark
      I wrote so many posts that made people cry after my husband died that it is an absolute joy to spread my wings and bring a little laughter!

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  8. You met your goals. This gave me a smile.

    Now - back to the dark side . . .

    JzB

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  9. A lovely, lighthearted bit of fun - I really enjoyed this!

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  10. I read somewhere that laughing is good for your health. I hope that's true. This was great. Cheers,

    W.

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  11. A nice light hearted approach to the prompt - made me grin.

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  12. More cheap Chinese crap! One day we're all going to be buried under it. In my post, my protagonist ended up in the same mess, but it was her own doing.

    Fun take on the prompt, Sarah. :)

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