hmmmm being critical here but re-reading the story again the 5th sentence is rather cluttered. Should have stopped it at "hindquarters" and started the next sentence "Suddenly a young man..." I know I could change it but it's an insight into the world of my hasty editing! Also I am always open to suggestions of how to improve my writing so please feel free to comment...
O my. This could DEFINITELY be a longer piece! I love the old tale of Jack & the Beanstalk, and adore what you've done with this and the "many years later..." angle.
Will definitely be watching this space....I want to know more!!! Great job!
hmmmm being critical here but re-reading the story again the 5th sentence is rather cluttered.
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I know I could change it but it's an insight into the world of my hasty editing!
Also I am always open to suggestions of how to improve my writing so please feel free to comment...
O my. This could DEFINITELY be a longer piece! I love the old tale of Jack & the Beanstalk, and adore what you've done with this and the "many years later..." angle.
ReplyDeleteWill definitely be watching this space....I want to know more!!! Great job!
definitely is a thought provoking twist on the known
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